Annotation Summary for 84718E1D-EF1F-4224-92F6-3E0042FCB42B: Page 1: Highlight the most important part of the story because it makesk the voice sound very controlling,

createing a controlling tone shows the theme that girls are taught to live by strict rules and

woman in this society is all about following strict rules. First, “this is how” repeats over and

over, the overwhelming tone makes reader feels heavy and nonstop and feels the same

pressure how daughter being lectured, like the mother is giving orders instead of normal

advice. It also shows the theme of fitting in because the mother wants her daughter to

follow society

Text your thesis should be one sentence. also, you have a lot of grammatical issues. i think you

should meet with someone at the campus writing center for weekly tutoring sessions. a lot

of the grammatical issues that you have are not ones that we will address in class Highlight The mother talk like she is giving rules instead normal talk. Text you need a topic sentence that makes a claim about your chosen word or phrase Page 2: Highlight how you sweep a corner,” and she says, “this is how you sweep a whole house” . And it is

not only about cleaning. It shows the mother wants the girl to learn rules step by step, like

training. The same thing happens when she explains smiling to different people. That

makes life everyday feel like acting, because you have to look your best depending on who

is watching, and girl rarely talk up,

Text i think a big issue is that a lot of this reads as summary. you spend a large portion of your

paragraph repeating the things that happen in the story. you want to avoid that. Highlight me feel the bread?” It is matter, although it sounds small. It shows the girl feels undure,

because even simple things can become a test. She is doing her best to follow the rules,

but she is still need to nervous that she might mess up and be judged.

Text you aren’t making a ton of strong claims about why the phrase is the most important for the

specifics of this story. you need to develop those claims to make this essay successful. also, again, i highly recommend working with someone at the writing center for the

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